My planning:
Criterion A: Knowledge and Understanding of the Text/Extract
7: I gave myself a seven in this category because I chose good quotes that could demonstrate my understanding of the text. These quotes were great examples of the overall themes but did not employ much figurative language, so I could not perform an awesome literary analysis. Also, I believe I set up the context of the novel and the scene fairly well.
Criterion B: Understanding the Use and Effect of Literary Features:
7: I gave myself a seven for mostly the same reason as Criterion A. These quotes were good examples of overall themes, and yet they were not heavy on the literary. There wasn't much figurative language to be analyzed.
Criterion C: Organization
4: I was well organized, but I could have used more explicit vocabulary to outline my transitions.
Criterion D: Language:
4: My use of language was clear and appropriate to my audience. However, I did say "um" and "like" a few too many times.
Overall: 22/30
I thought your analysis was great, Em! Just a few notes:
ReplyDelete1. Be careful in your context. Ishiguro wrote the novel in the early 2000s (published in 2005) but set it in the 1990s around the time of Dolly the sheep and all that cool clone-y stuff.
2. I completely disagree with your grade for Criterion C. You deserve all 5 marks as your analysis was incredibly well organized. I felt your transitions were very clear with the words "first," "secondly," and "overall". I really liked how you stated your main points in fancy IB lingo, but then took a more conversational approach to the explanation. I think you hit the nail on the head with the semi-informal tone! I also really like how you referenced yourself and personal experiences. Not sure how IB will feel about that one but I enjoyed it (: Fabulous job!
Wow, Emily, yours sounded great! I agree with Hailey and I definitely think you analyzed your passage very well. You organized it in a way that I could follow it without necessarily reading the excerpt, which is important. Really, really good job! Teach me your ways!
ReplyDeleteI definitely agree with Hailey! Your IOC flowed extremely well and you made it seem effortless! I also struggle with trying to make sure that themes also reflect on literary and figurative language. Your end result and conclusion were awesome; you really set the stage and tied everything together really well. Good luck on your real IOC (not that you'll need it :D)
ReplyDeleteI definitely agree with Hailey! Your IOC flowed extremely well and you made it seem effortless! I also struggle with trying to make sure that themes also reflect on literary and figurative language. Your end result and conclusion were awesome; you really set the stage and tied everything together really well. Good luck on your real IOC (not that you'll need it :D)
ReplyDeleteI mostly agree with the grades you gave yourself, and I think that Hailey made some good points as well. Your IOC was very well organized, and I think you did an excellent job with the analysis of the passage.
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